17 year old Karina Haack was getting out of the shower when she slipped and fell knocking over the mirror. When the mirror fell the shards of glass cut her everywhere and she died of blood loss.
Karina was a PSEO student at Anoka-Ramsey Community College. She had high hopes for the future and was set on reaching them. According to her friends she loved to dance, act and sing. Karina's friends Brianna and Paige said "Karina was never really coordinated, she was always tripping and falling up the stairs."
Karina leaves behind her parents, Geniene and Peter Haack, and two older siblings. The funeral will be on Sunday, friends and family are all invited as they remember the short life of Karina Haack.
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